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Oh we're hopping now [Jul. 16th, 2008|10:27 pm]
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I'm considering redoing this picture, and I can see some faults with it (His head is not the right size in his hair, I know) but I can't figure out what exactly is making it so...meh. I think I'm going to explore a more interesting composition, but any other help would be awesome.

Medium is charcoal, mainly through erasure, and colored pencils.

From: kallotasapaino
2008-07-17 02:50 pm (UTC)
I'm not very good in giving concrit for manga-style art, because I usually end up commenting on the ridiculously large eyes and everything else style-related. Well, I could try anyway.
Generally I like the dark mood, so you should definitely keep that in the next version of the artwork. I don't know about the head's size ratio, but the eyes seem to be a bit too up (maybe because of the size - oh darn, I ended up commenting on that again... >_<). Otherwise it's all really smooth and nice to look at.
(Sorry, this is the best I can do right now. Hope it was somewhat better than nothing.)
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[User Picture]From: draconicmaiden
2008-07-17 04:03 pm (UTC)
despite the anime-style of large eyes (bc i draw anime too!) i do agree that they may be placed too high up. there is no room for the brow bone or eyebrows even if they are to be covered by the headband.
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[User Picture]From: penguinfaery
2008-07-17 08:50 pm (UTC)
Those headband throw me for such a loop (Mainly because for most the character design to work, the characters have to have HUGE foreheads)

I'll work on lowering 'em a bit.
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[User Picture]From: penguinfaery
2008-07-17 08:51 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'll defeintly work on getting the face aligned right.
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