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Hello - newbie over here! [Jun. 5th, 2008|09:03 pm]
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[kallotasapaino]
[Current Location |Finland]

I just joined, in order to get some preliminary advice and possibly actual redlining for this sketch of mine...
WARNING! male/male kissing!



Feel free to point out anatomy glitches and such, for I still have the chance to modify the sketch.
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[User Picture]From: penguinfaery
2008-06-05 10:49 pm (UTC)
It's always so hard to get faces to mesh up right, and tonugue to not look like slugs, so you did very good there. I'll try to red line this later, but IDK how much help I'll be.

You ears look a little big, specially the guy on the right. I'd be very careful about making sure you have enough back of the head (I can't tell from the lines you have drawn, and something looks off with the eyes, but I can't put my finger on what.

beautiful chin and neck ares though, specially the guy on the left.
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From: kallotasapaino
2008-06-06 06:34 am (UTC)
Thank you very much for your effort! I'd be very thankful if you'd do some redlining, for despite how much help you already are, redlining often brings the point across much more efficiently.
Thanks again!
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[User Picture]From: suffocated_moth
2008-06-06 05:32 am (UTC)
Boys kissings and a bit of realistism. WOOT! First off the neck looks amazing even in it's sketchy state and I like how you added details to the face like the cheek and the curve under the nose. A lot of people forget about those actually being there.

The guy on the right eyes seem a little too forward, and his ear a little more pointed then it should be for a human. Unless it's not human in which case you can just ignore this. The right side seems to have the ear draw very well for the detail, while the left seems a little overdetailed so you may want to decide just what level of complexity you want and have it stick for both sides. Other then that it looks really great!
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From: kallotasapaino
2008-06-06 06:59 am (UTC)
Yeah, it hasn't been long since I myself started drawing those lines on faces by default.
As for the ear - they both are supposed to be human, so thank you for pointing that little mistake out. I modified the ear a bit on the actual sketch, and also moved the eye back just a little.
Thanks, you've been a lot of help! :3
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[User Picture]From: suffocated_moth
2008-06-06 07:06 am (UTC)
^^ It's my pleasure.
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